The video can be seen below:
1) The pitch.
2) A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch. Describe what stood out to you as important, what feedback surprised you the most, what feedback you think was outright wrong or silly.
-The feedback I found most important was the most honest ones. These helped me by providing an outlet to improve upon my fluidity of speech and overall level of comfort with the camera itself and also with my pitch.
3) What did you change, based on the feedback?
-Like I said, I didn't change much substantively but I did change my delivery and fine tuned it to be a more effective pitch to the listener themselves. I think I was more comfortable with my pitch so I was able to project more confidence in my pitch itself.
-Mitch
Hi Mitch! Great post! I think you delivered your business concept very professionally and clearly. You were very confident in what you were saying, and that definitely goes a long way with consumers. If I had a couple critiques, I would say make the pitch longer and connect with the camera! You have a great idea, so you would really want to fill up the entire minute with as much information as possible to convince consumers why they should invest in you. You also tend to look down/away from the camera a lot, which can be distracting when people are trying to listen to what you have to say. Otherwise, this is one of the most polished pitches I've seen, so well done! My business idea is pretty different from yours, but you can check it out here: http://morganjohnsonblog.blogspot.com
ReplyDeleteHey Mitch!
ReplyDeleteThis is a really great elevator pitch. I can tell that your pitch was very well practiced and well versed. You are passionate about your idea and really know what you are talking about. If there is any advice I could give, I would say have someone else hold the camera so that you have the freedom to practice open body language and use your hands to make points. It would better engage your target audience. I also think that it could be improved if you lengthened it by adding some information about implementation in the middle of your pitch. Great job though!
My post is quite different than yours, but if you would like to check it out and give some feedback, please do! http://mbvandepol.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hi Mitch,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed listening to your elevator pitch. It was short and straight to the point yet it was still polite because you introduced yourself and thanked your audience. I also like the tone you used, at the very beginning you were a bit fast and felt like you could've used a pause somewhere in between but then you slowed down a bit with more pauses. I'd like to hear a bit more in depth of what your company is exactly all about such as why it sets you apart from competitors. Check out my business idea if you'd like at http://carolinalafuent3003.blogspot.com/
Hey, Mitch. Nicely polished pitch you delivered, and professional, to boot. Now that you've got that aspect down, why exactly should I use your financial services? You say you will work more diligently than your competitors, but what will make your service more convenient and comfortable to use, and what sort of benefit will the client get from your service that they cannot get from others? Will the service be more precise? Speedy?
ReplyDeleteMitch,
ReplyDeleteNice post. You were confident and professional - two things people really look for in choosing which financial services to hire. I like that you introduced yourself and gave a little background story. I am curious as to what will set your company apart from competitors considering you did not give much information about the business itself. Check out my idea at I think you have a great idea! Trading textbooks would allow students to save so much more money than they would spend buying or renting one. I also like that it allows you to interact with people who have taken the course, who could probably offer some helpful tips as well. It made me curious though, would the people trading the textbooks pay for the shipping to the person receiving it or would they pay a website use fee that would include shipping of the books?
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Mitch,
ReplyDeleteYears ago while in Pharmaceutical sales I had to learn to sell my drugs to a doc in under a few minutes - sometimes between patient rooms. Your pitch was short enough to get the point across - and was concise, and clearly states the name of the company and what you are doing. My only suggestion would be to ask a question in your pitch. Asking a question acts as an attention grabber and attention gauge as to how interested they might be in your conversation. Based on how interested they are in learning why you asked them the question you did, you can tailor your message to meet their interest levels.
Mitch,
ReplyDeleteYears ago while in Pharmaceutical sales I had to learn to sell my drugs to a doc in under a few minutes - sometimes between patient rooms. Your pitch was short enough to get the point across - and was concise, and clearly states the name of the company and what you are doing. My only suggestion would be to ask a question in your pitch. Asking a question acts as an attention grabber and attention gauge as to how interested they might be in your conversation. Based on how interested they are in learning why you asked them the question you did, you can tailor your message to meet their interest levels.
Hey there Mitch,
ReplyDeleteGreat pitch and a great business to get into. I am up in the air right now about becoming an actuary or a wealth manager as well. I think you were clearly and well spoken, and your business was confidently defined. One suggestion that I can think of is a quick, few sentence appeal to a wide range of clients. I think that most people's connotation of "wealth management" is for an extremely affluent group of people, but I think if you were to appeal to even middle-class professionals that would make you stand out as a well-rounded firm. Great job and best of luck!
Hey Mitch,
ReplyDeleteI definitely enjoyed your elevator pitch. I like how you gave a little bit of background to yourself in the beginning as well. I have not seen much of that in other elevator pitches and I thought that was a cool piece of the pitch. In essence you are selling yourself along with the business in your pitch. I would've liked to hear maybe more about what sets you apart from the other financial competitors however.